Memories of a rebel.

Another story I made during class, tell me what you think

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It's been a while since i could write down something.
Mostly because of the hatred and terror raging outside.
My name is Lance, I am a commander of a rebel organisation known as Work Towards Freedom (WTF).
The rebelloin started somewhere about 463 years ago, the authorities took advantage of their power and started killing and torturing men, women and even children without having to face the consequences.
One man got sick of it after his 6 year old daughter got raped and murdered brutally by a soldier, that's when he started WTF.
Since then, a war is raging between the authorities and WTF, I joined about 14 years ago, after 6 years of duty, I was promoted to the commander of Division 6 for saving the life of a general.
This war just keeps on going, nobody knows when it will end, or even if its going to.I've been charged with a mission to clear the way to the authorities' HQ, I don't know if this mission will be successful, many of our men died during several tempts.
As i write down what could be my last sentence, I salute you. Someday you could be the one who ends this war.

heart breaking story, it's so good it makes you wanna cry

it does?

Not heartbreaking..the plot is but it could use some more adjectives, maybe a bit more story to it I understand its a journal writing, but..yeah. o.o

its supposed to continue after this, im thinking of a sequel now